please look at poem. your view?
Tittle:Distorted vision By Tia Metcher
Reflection in the mirror,
Is distorted by a picture,
To portray to be another,
Is more faker than the other?
Silicon bubs,
Fat puffy lips,
Porcelain skin,
Fake tan skin,
Distorted image in the mirror,
Windex cleaner won’t make clearer,
Distorted image is been portrayed,
I was not born to appear this way,
“What is this that I see?”
“Is Dolly Parton in front of me?”
I do believe it’s me,
How the hell did I not see?
Distorted image is been portrayed,
I was not born to appear this way,
I’m quiet happy being me,
Whether I’m fat or skinny,
I shall hold my head up high,
And thank, that I’m alive,
I’m quiet happy being me,
That is all I won’t to be.
I guess you should fix how you written your poem. Like the first two stanzas have four lines each and the other stanzas have two lines… (Just my opinion)
And the ending is a little wrong in grammar…
I shall hold my head up high,
And thank, that I’m alive, (Who are you thanking to?)
I’m quiet happy being me,
That is all I won’t to be. (you will not to be or you want to be?)
Bye, take care.
