please revise this short pargarph its urgent?
Foreign gifts give receivers the impression that the givers respect them. Generally, people only recall exotic presents. When I first came to Canada and stayed with a homestay family, I gave them gifts which represented my home country. Alex, my homestay dad, admired the gifts since he cannot buy them at a local shopping mall. Furthermore, in 2005, a group of Japanese students stayed at my house for three days to experience a western style of living. They gave my family petite dolls wearing kimonos, bags of Japanese chips, and a special brush that is not sold in Canada. I cannot forget the elegant gifts that I received. If I were Japanese, I would not value the students’ gifts highly, but since I am not, the gifts were exquisite to me. Receivers always recollect exotic gifts.
How about doing your own homework?? It’s “homework help,” not do “type in your homework and others will do it for you” It’s truly not that hard to do.. I looked at it. I will give you suggestions though. 1. Use a different word for receivers and givers. You sound like you are in elementary school. 2. Don’t use the word “generally” you are making a consensus that you do not know to be true or not. 3. Stay in the same tense, you keep switching (could not instead of cannot – it was in the past) 4. The sentence beginning with “furthermore” is a run on sentence. 5 If they are Japanese potato chips, then you need to write the word potato, not just “chips” 6. Cannot be bought should be used instead of “is not sold” 7. Will not instead of “cannot” and add onto the sentence 8 The use of “recollect” is not necessarily incorrect, but it makes sounds weird in this context. Overall, good context, just make it sound more high school level rather than elementary. You show that you know what you are talking about and that you can write – but you are being lazy…
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