Is this any good? “Your Harlequin Doll” (i’m only 14 so tell me if I have any talent)?
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Your Harlequin Doll (yeah, I have a thing for harlequins lol) Delicate. Fragile. Breakable. I’m your doll. Play with me. Use me. Hurt me. I don’t want to be held. I want to be gripped. And pushed against the wall. Or bent over a table. I want to be forced. Even though I may struggle. I want you to grab me so hard you leave bruises on my wineglass wrists. I want to bleed. I want to feel something. But all I could ever feel was pain. So hurt me. Use me. Play with me. Your. Harlequin. Doll.
Any suggestions? Thanks. Oh and btw i’m only 14. so chyeah.
I think its horribly overused. Just the simple use me break me blah blah lines, they’ve been used so many times in so many songs and other poems. Its just the overall idea.
Try to be more creative with those terms… Simplicity is overrated when its overused.
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